Blogger #2

Blogger #2

Original #1

      My name is Michael Donsbach; this is a short story of how my identity was shaped. Many things in my life have an influence on my identity, like the area of where I grew up, the people I surrounded myself with, and the many schools I went to. My childhood was an important piece in how I made my identity. We all started shaping ourselves at a certain time in our life, as for me it was in Elementary school.

Simple sentence #1

      My name is Michael Donsbach; This is how my identity was shaped. The are from where I grew up, The people I surrounded myself with and the many schools I went to shaped my identity. My childhood shaped my identity. I first started to shape myself in Elementary school.

Semicolons,Commas, and fanboys#1

       My name is Michael Donsbach, This is a short story of how my identity was shaped; many things in my life have had an influence on my identity, like the area where I grew up, the people I surrounded myself with, and the schools I had went to, my childhood was an important piece in how I made my identity but, we all started shaping ourselves at a certain time in our life, as for me that was in Elementary school.

Original #2

       It all starts in Elementary school, I went to Ralph Waldo Elementary school. This was my first time attending an actual school and at this time in my life I was used to being around my sister all the time so it was awkward for me to not be around her, I didn't really know how to not be around her. My first day of school I disliked it not only because I couldn't see my sister, but I didn't know anybody there. Well school goes on and my uncle Bird picks both my sister and I up from shool and head to our family mechanic shop. Going to the shop was a daily routine.

Simple sentence #2

       I went to Ralph Waldo Elementary school this is where it all started. My first time attending a school and it was awkward for me because I couldn't be with my sister, I didn't know how not to be with her. I disliked my first day of school because I couldn't be with my sister and I didn't know anyone. School goes on my uncle picks us up and we head to our mechanic shop which was a daily routine.

Semicolon,commas, and fanboys#2

      It all starts in Elementary school, I went to Ralph Waldo Elementary school and this was my first time attending an actual school, So at this time in my life I was used to being around my sister all the time so it was awkward for me not to be around her, I really didn't know how not to be around her; My first day of school I disliked it not only because I couldn't see my sister but, I didn't know anyone but School goes on and my uncle Bird picks us up and we head o our family mechanic shop which was a daily routine.