Monday, February 22, 2016

Blogger #2

Original #1:

“You have to see the people who you are friends with”, she said looking at me with a serious face. “Many of those people that you consider your friends come out to be nobody in your life. Also, you have to realize that society will always criticize, judge, discriminate, be against, and even disappoint you. But keep in mind that nobody has power over you. You have to learn how you make the decisions that you know will make you a better person. Your parents will always be there for you, and they will always guide you through the right paths.”
Simple Sentences
You have to see the people who you are friends with. she said looking at me with a serious face. Many of those people that you consider your friends come out to be nobody in your life. you have to realize that society will always criticize judge discriminate be against and even disappoint you. keep in mind that nobody has power over you. You have to learn how you make the decisions. that you know will make you a better person. Your parents will always be there for you.they will always guide you through the right paths.
Semicolons/Commas and FANBOYS
You have to see the people who you are friends with;she said looking at me with a serious face. Many of those people that you consider your friends come out to be nobody in your life. Also, you have to realize that society will always criticize, judge, discriminate, be against, and even disappoint you. But keep in mind that nobody has power over you. You have to learn how you make the decisions that you know will make you a better person. Your parents will always be there for you, and they will always guide you through the right paths.

Original #2
This is all she had to say to me. Those words meant a lot more than what they meant for her. Here I was getting advice from the humble woman who came leaving her parents and her hometown to give me a better future. Her desired was to see me graduate from high school, and my goal was to make her proud. Today I am in college, fighting for my goal to become a sign language interpreter. I identify myself as a person who is determined to fight for their goals, to have a better life and to show my mother that her advice was not taken for granted. Because of that night were I was pretending to be concentrated in my homework, her words helped me who I am now, and like she said society will always be against you but it will never have power over me.
Simple Sentences
This is all she had to say to me. Those words meant a lot more than what they meant for her. I was getting advice from the humble woman who came leaving her parents and her hometown to give me a better future. Her desired was to see me graduate from high school.my goal was to make her proud. Today I am in college.fighting for my goal to become a sign language interpreter. I identify myself as a person who is determined to fight for their goals. to have a better life and to show my mother that her advice was not taken for granted. Because of that night were I was pretending to be concentrated in my homework.her words helped me who I am now.like she said society will always be against .  it will never have power over me.
Semicolons/ Commas and FANBOYS
This is all she had to say to me; those words meant a lot more than what they meant for her. So, I was getting advice from the humble woman who came leaving her parents and her hometown to give me a better future. Her desired was to see me graduate from high school, and my goal was to make her proud. yet today I am in college, fighting for my goal to become a sign language interpreter. I identify myself as a person who is determined to fight for their goals, to have a better life and to show my mother that her advice was not taken for granted. Because of that night; were I was pretending to be concentrated in my homework, her words helped me who I am now, and like she said society will always be against you but it will never have power over me.





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